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Scoot's avatar

OOOOOOOKAY BUDDY. OKAY. I see you. I SEE YOU SNEAKIN' AROUND HERE.

There is much much much more to this than meets the eye.

The gradual progression of Maldurian from "concerned father" to "final boss" was excellent. The gradual elucidation of the Problem At Hand. The references to "That time in the room" that go unexplained. The deliberate refusal to explain your magic system and YET your ability to make me come away with a clear picture of how it works.

This Epistolary format is incredible and I am quite partial to it myself (cough) but I read this and I think two things. 1- I want more. 2- I want to collab a back and forth somehow? Is that even possible? It feels more difficult than the average fiction collaboration. 3- I want to write my own. You simultaneously entertained and fed my creative fire. Excellent, excellent, excellent. Keep going with this. I love it.

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I LOVED this. The prose was beautiful, and the narrative voice reminded me of a less self-aware Screwtape. You handled the twist in the story’s dynamic so well, and I’m excited to read the rest!

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