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I like how Taurin's character evokes sympathy and disgust at the same time! Very conflicting... :)

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Thank you! I was worried about that balance, so your comment comes as a relief. Thanks for reading!

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I loved this. Very powerful imagery the whole way through.

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Glad you liked it, Hanna. I felt the same way about yours. Like you mentioned to Hyun Woo, its fascinating how our story concepts intersected. I guess we go for the same sort of vibes!

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Great story. Clean prose and great pacing. Heart pounding action with just the right amount of exposition and world building. What's not to love?

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Such high praise! Thank you, Maximilian. I'm both proud and humbled. 🤝

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That reversal at the end...brutal, but fitting. So very good.

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Thank you! And re: the brutality ... somehow, it was only when Taurin picked up the severed head by its hair that I realized that this was a darker story then I had initially imagined. 🫠

Relevant: https://substack.com/@ericfalden/note/c-53502097

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Oh, I know that feeling! My mother asked if the shark story was going to keep her up at night, so I went to look for something nicer in my archive, and...it turns out that there is maybe one post that I'd qualify as "light" or "happy". I really thought I was doing better than this, haha.

Actually, when I first explained the plot of my serial to my husband, he had to stop me at "Nazi medical experiments" so that I could realize what I'd done. 🙃

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I am bookmarking all the participants stories so I can read them at a more quiet less busy time. I am interested in seeing what you came up with

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Okay, your piece was action packed but what got me the most was the feeling in all the characters involved particularly the pursuers and that chilling ending was a nice one too.

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Ha! I l am amused by your random guess on the time zones. I really enjoyed reading this. The ironic twist of a fantasy knight's tale was very well done.

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Haha, good. By "random guess" I mean I looked it up, but I couldn't resist giving you a little shoutout, Hyun Kim. Glad you enjoyed it; I enjoyed yours as well.

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Such a good story!! Good action and very exciting and interesting world❤

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Thank you for your kind words! Stay tuned for more :)

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EEK!!!! LOVE that!

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Thanks, Stephanie! Glad you enjoyed.

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Jul 12Liked by Eric Falden

Love that chase scene, and the twist at the end, delivered with a smile.

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Good last line.

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I had hoped so! Thanks for reading, Randall!

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Super engrossing story! I loved the world and can't wait to see more of your stories!

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Thank you for a very engaging read! Good story telling. I like the way it keeps moving and taking me with it.

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Thanks for reading and for the kind words Robbie! Appreciate your time!

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Cracking story with a brilliant ending. Love it!

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I know i'm late to the party, but this piece was fantastic. Absolute action from start to finish. You struck a perfect balance between good scenic and gory descrption, fast-paced action, and character motivation. That little memory right in the middle - where he recalled his father's dissapointment - felt perfectly timed. A blazingly good read.

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Great story! Yikes- the ending!!!

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Thanks, Ingrid!

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There are few lords in a land where you have to fight giants.

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