You paint a grim and fascinating world here, one that's beautiful but full of hardship, struggle, and the weight of tradition. If the first part had my interest, this has solidified my investment. As I guessed I would be, I'm now chomping at the bit for this to continue.
This was a wonderful follow-up. I really liked the point of view from the shepherds, as well as the remorse he felt at killing the boy. The grim reality of survival is evident here, and I am excited to see how our Samyuzot develops in his coming adventures.
Oof. I am feeling for the poor samuzyot. The boy’s need to be a warrior really echoed the first story and the man’s insistence on fighting to claim a woman. Can’t wait to see what’s next!
I like the way you described how the woman and her brother described the Samyuzot. At first, she pities him and doesn't want her younger brother to kill him, but once the exile must choose between his own life and her brother's life, all pity is gone. That is very human.
Also, you did a good job showing how the brother longed to prove himself and to fight. And as soon as he found that the exile had stolen his knife, he was freed to act on that longing without bringing the anger of the gods down on him.
Thanks, Keyon. That tension—and the desire to tell a tragedy based on that tension—is what fueled the creative impulses on this one. Glad that came through the words for you.
You paint a grim and fascinating world here, one that's beautiful but full of hardship, struggle, and the weight of tradition. If the first part had my interest, this has solidified my investment. As I guessed I would be, I'm now chomping at the bit for this to continue.
Thank you! The next installment will come in time. Like I said in the end matter: there will be brighter days ahead for this poor fellow. Eventually.
This was a wonderful follow-up. I really liked the point of view from the shepherds, as well as the remorse he felt at killing the boy. The grim reality of survival is evident here, and I am excited to see how our Samyuzot develops in his coming adventures.
Thanks, David! I’m excited to share the story with you
Oof. I am feeling for the poor samuzyot. The boy’s need to be a warrior really echoed the first story and the man’s insistence on fighting to claim a woman. Can’t wait to see what’s next!
I like the way you described how the woman and her brother described the Samyuzot. At first, she pities him and doesn't want her younger brother to kill him, but once the exile must choose between his own life and her brother's life, all pity is gone. That is very human.
Also, you did a good job showing how the brother longed to prove himself and to fight. And as soon as he found that the exile had stolen his knife, he was freed to act on that longing without bringing the anger of the gods down on him.
Really enjoyes this, Eric.
Thanks, Luke
Thanks, Keyon. That tension—and the desire to tell a tragedy based on that tension—is what fueled the creative impulses on this one. Glad that came through the words for you.